Score: 5

"Try harder"

submission: G.I. Jimmy-Jungle Assault

date: July 12, 2009

This was a decent effort. I like the old school video game look and all. I just have a few issues.

For a start. Germans should not be called Bill or Bob or Frank... They should be Manfred, Gunter, Franz.... There is no random comedy value in that. It's hard to laugh at something that makes absolutely no sense. I am sure there are Germans named Bill, I just feel that in the interest of you starting a series, you should maybe work on accuracy from that point. I would if I was starting a series.

Secondly, you need sound so bad. That was painfully quiet to watch. The text was impossible to read or understand half the time. It looks like you did things as you were going and without any plan. If you are planning on more GI Jimmy episodes, write them out. Make a story for starters and don't count on an idea to be all you need. If you plan ahead your story, it will flow much smoother and have a sense of purpose.

Not trying to be a jerk and critical. I just want to see you do the best you are capable of because it looks like you have some talent. Try again. I am not rating this highly because of all I have said, but if you re-submit it and have fixed the issues, I can assure you that it will get a much better rating from me. Cheers.

Score: 8

"Not bad"

submission: The Pigeon!

date: July 12, 2009

Not great, but not bad. I didn't get much of a laugh out of it. I did chuckle when the plane is hit and starts to go down. That was really very well animated I might add. You have some serious ability, just all you need to do is build up a plot of some kind and follow it through.

Random is only funny when it happens in short bursts. If you take too long it doesn't have the same effect. Some of the funniest things on here are movie parody's and such. They stuff all the movie into a minute or two. It's very quick and you laugh because the speed of how things hit you. Before you even really know what you just say, bang! you get another random scene.

I only mention it because you mention below that the point of not having a plot was to make it funny.

Keep up the good work though and keep at it. I think you have real potential!

Score: 9

"Hit and Miss"

submission: Back to the Futures

date: July 12, 2009

The first half animation was crap but you salvaged it nicely in the second half. I thought it was pretty funny, overall the art was pretty decent, it was brief, it was amusing it was good. I just found the computer voices were kinda crummy. If you did voice acting, it would have been better. Good work overall though.